Wow, finally a love song in the works that is somewhat original! Kudos to you for that one. there is only one part that feels cliche:
Quote:
Hey boy, I wish I could tell you the truth
It is something inside me
It is something they call love
But now something tells me you don’t feel the same
Cuz I wrote you a song
And your eyes seems so empty
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The whole "it is" bit just doesn't work, and i'm sure you can fill in something much better with a little effort.
Also, its a little confusing that the narrator gets lost in this boys eyes in the first stanza, but then the rest of the song, the eyes are empty. A little bit contradictory there!
Think on it and let us know how you change it up.