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Old 07-29-2009, 10:58 PM   #27 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by Nicktarist View Post
haven't written in a while--so I thought I should warm up a bit before I went back and rewrote some songs, and started new ones.

I was searching through some torn papers
finding old songs of sin, doubt, n' hate
running along the floor like vapours
in an effort to avoid their fate

I haven't written for a long time
though if you bottle it up inside
it will come back up spouting new rhyms
driving your pen for a quick joy ride

but there are things I should be doing
cleaning my room, or reading that book
though I'd like to indulge a little:
thanks for giving my lyrics a look

feel free to rip it to shreds.

peace out,
-nick

Sorry dude, but that one particular line just sounds kinda awkward to me. I dunno, man. Otherwise though, it was pretty decent!
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