VEGANGELICA

Hi, Tanner99,
I categorize your first three songs as "revenge fantasy" songs and feel they show anger and the desire for revenge effectively, while the final song is a somewhat chilling love song. Your planned instrumentals (guitar with distortion for the middle two, and acoustic guitar for the love song) sound appropriately chosen.

The "revenge fantasy" songs, as I view them, are scary because they sound like what I imagine someone would write if he/she were potentially planning to kill the person/people at whom the anger is directed. Let's hope the songs work to help listeners burn off steam rather than urge them on to commit atrocities (world domination, etc.)!

In the first song, the line that is the scariest, I feel, is this one:

because when a person kills herself she makes the choice herself, and so it is scary to think of someone not realizing that she is responsible for her own actions, rather than someone else being responsible (no matter how awfully that other person acted). (Of course, there are, probably, true scenarios in which killers *have* arranged it so that a person is forced somehow to kill herself...a subject, I imagine, of a fair number of horror movies).

I feel the order of the songs works well, since you begin with a dead underwater song (that also describes with strong imagery that experience of being killed), then have two songs about returning from the dead for revenge, followed by a more loving song.

The scariest part of the final love song, for me, are these lines:
because it combines both consolation ("hush my little angel") and horror (since the consolation isn't very consoling...being put out of our misery).
This song may especially appeal to people who believe there will be a religious "end of the world."

I have two recommendations for the final love song:

When you write
the lines "there is a lot of fear/There are a lot of tears" sound anti-climactic because of the use of "there is," which I feel lacks punch. Perhaps you could write something that (at least to me) maintains the intensity of "doom" a little more, such as, perhaps,

Our doom is near.
People/we are consumed by fear
and drenched in tears.

Also, when you write:

I feel you should replace "can" with "could," because "could" means something that can't actually happen.

--Erica