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Originally Posted by VEGANGELICA
Hi, Xxawwxsugarxx,
Please tell me more about rhyming and the downside of it, as you see it? Is it distracting because your mind focuses in on the rhymes and they take precedence over the meaning...which I understand can happen, especially when someone is foolish enough as to rhyme "care" with "bear"? As you surely know by now, I'm rather fond of rhyming. It gives a song some rhythm and a soothing sense of timing. 
Thanks for trying to read "Free" through without being distracted, though. I appreciate the effort.
Say, I rather liked "inhale the sunset sky," too! I was on a quest to inject drug-related words into the song (couldn't get "inject" in there; and used "breathe out" instead of exhale). Did you notice? Nicotine (obviously)  , "glass" (slang term for meth; and alcohol use, of course), "wings" (drug slang for heroine), "line" (of cocaine), "drag" (as on a marijuana joint), "bear" (as in "great bear," or fentanyl), "shoot the breeze" (nitrous oxide)...except I mean it in its original meaning...which is to talk, and finally "use" (your voice instead of drugs). I was feeling rather clever to have crammed all that into a tiny song, and one that rhymes, too!
-- Erica
P.S. I also adore alliteration! |
Actually, I feel horrible that I didn't notice that at all. x.X I think the reason I can't read rhymes is because I automatically associate rhyming with childhood, so if someone's writing a song about death, for instance, I can't connect it well in my mind. Except of course, 'Ring Around the Rosie'... but that rhyme is just creepy. And the fact that little children play that... *shivers*
Anyway, that's my rhyming rant (alliteration)
Don't let me get in your way though, write on. (no pun intended) ^_^