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Old 06-03-2009, 10:45 AM   #1 (permalink)
manch115
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Default Could use some honest opinions

I wrote a song for the first time. I just would like a few opinions, see what other people think. I dont have music for it, but I think it would be similar pace to music by the Fray

My world has fallen dark tonight
The clouds roll in and the truth came down
He's not so perfect after all
Now I'm caught up in the dark without a light

Time turns the pages, I quickly lose my place
Swept up in the dark i feel alone
Turn it upside down, there's no way I can erase
You found me in the clouds, now here we are
And the story starts again


I want to feel
Open your eyes and let me in
Jaded and broken but im standing here
Take it all, Lets make this real



Seeing you inside my head
I hear you playing for me as i sleep
I'm together with the feelings from the sound
right beside you I'm alone in my bed

i wake and find your so far away
i ride on an angels wings to be near you
hiding the fear i have i smile in your arms
i hang my hopes on every word that you say


I want to feel
Open your eyes and let me in
Jaded and broken but im standing here
Take it all, Lets make this real


do you want to be something to me
wrap me up in all that you are
i am everything you want
ill take take the chance if you can see

I want to feel
Open your eyes and let me in
Jaded and broken but im standing here
Take it all, Lets make this real
Hurt me gently
I feel the warmth on my skin
Don't turn off the light
It all falls on us
I want to feel
Open your eyes and let me in
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