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Old 08-10-2008, 11:55 PM   #2 (permalink)
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That might be why this pen feels less mighty than ever,
Why I fear that blade more than all others have swung
’Cause I haven’t shone this bright in what seems like forever,
Since the days we were foolish and smiling and young



How many years has it been since the colour left my eyes?
How long was it she watched only to see what lay in waiting?
Why wasn’t I surprised to awake with her in the sky
And how come the clouds only open when I feel my faith is fading?
Beautiful.

Everything is put together really well, and although at some parts it gets a bit wordy, it has good fluency overall. Nice work, I look forward to reading more.
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