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Originally Posted by Ace
Ouch. That's a bit harsh, Ethan.
Unfortunately, I'll have to agree with em' on this one.
Perhaps if you chose a different subject, and made sure not to end every line with words that rhyme. Example:
heart, apart, pain, gain, down, around, sound, turn, burn....
I could keep going.
Try to rewrite it using a different style.
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i generally do write with a rhyme, sometimes good, sometimes bad. i guess i can take it from a different perspective. thanks. ;]
(and yes
construction criticism is more appreciated than outright insult)