You're right, no SPELLING errors that I see, but about half of i is gramatically wrong. now on to the actual song....
the entire thing is a metaphor, but you never give the reader any inclination about what the metaphor is DESCRIBING. what game is it that the narrator is in? there's no indication whatsoever about what the song is about, for all we know is could be some kid who'd gotten tired of playing soccer. Not a very interesting subject.
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What you've done becomes the judge of what you're going to do -- especially in other people's minds. When you're traveling, you are what you are right there and then. People don't have your past to hold against you. No yesterdays on the road.
William Least Heat Moon, Blue Highways
Your toughest competitor lives in your head. Some days his name is fear, or pain, or gravity. Stomp his ass.
HOOKED ON THE WHITE POWDER
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