Awesome, one thing though.
"the silence of these car seats wrapped the two of us in the same blanket,
a blanket of letters kept in the pockets of their senders."
Change the blanket of letter parts, it doesn't sound that great and you use blanket twice in the same verse thing.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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