Expand your vocabulary, the words are repetitive as hell and it makes it feel like im reading the same thing over and over.
I don't really like this, its kind of your typical teenage cliche hate my life sort of thing. "Featherless flight" sounds sort of cool, but it also sounds cheesy too.
Plus "I wanna fly away and leave this place behind" sounds like something thats already been done alot.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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