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Old 09-22-2006, 01:27 PM   #5 (permalink)
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Originally Posted by DontRunMeOver View Post
Well, it would be another verse, another bridge, repeat of the same chorus, then an instrumental mid-section and then finishing with a chorus, so it would actually be about 3 minutes in total, not too short.

I'm going to record it once I've got the lyrics sorted for the other verse and chorus.

The problems is, I've pretty much summed up what I wanted to say in the verse, bridge and chorus that I've got here and now have to think of what to write about in the other verse and bridge.

And subject-wise, I'm glad you caught the power in it, because this one kind of comes from experience. I know two different girls who have both told me about how they got pregnant and the guy wouldn't return their initial phonecalls or texts... hence, the guy never knew that he actually had a child for a brief moment, before the girl had it aborted. And in both cases it was the guy's own fault, because he wouldn't even allow a dialogue with the girl.

Aha, I think maybe that could be the subject of the other verse?
Or you could really rip open the subject, by including the unborn child's perspective.
A bit surreal, but even more powerful, all the same.

I really like the subjects you tackle in your songwriting DRMO.
Always varied.
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