I see two minor lines that I didn't like that much.
is shrinking under this onslaught you perpetrate on me,
perpetrate just doesn't seem like it'd fit. And the line with tiny hand in it.
Other than that, I think it's pretty good.
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Originally Posted by RezZ
I think I know much better than you ever will how Mettalica is. I used to play for 2 years in a Mettalica cover band.
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