I think you should change the last line, I mean its good. But it doesn't really feel like it ends it, if you get my meaning. Its just kind of an average ending. Thats kind of the only thing I havee to add. I liked it.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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