Originally Posted by PipersLabyrinthX

Scream my name
Rip me apart
The pain helps me see
And, oh, how I love it

(He's in your head
Like his nails in your back)

I want you to lie to me
I love it when you want me
I hate it when you're here,
so back the **** off

(My heart burns for you
I love you but I just dont want you)

I dont really write lyrics. I compose melodies better. So these arent the best, but I want to improve, so I posted these which I just wrote and hoped to get some pointers and suggestions.

How bad is it?