No.
Your very last line was a cliche.
The idea is so unoriginal and very played out.
You're very vague.
This song has nothing going for it.
As for the simple yes or no answer thing:
smoke some weed.
You posted this because you wanted our opinion of your work. There isn't a debate or argument. You either live with our criticism or die because you dont' like it. It means nothing to us how you take it.
But I take an even bigger offense to it because it was a waste of time. Not that I'm doing anything important at the moment anyway but it's still a waste of effort reading this.
No offense to your skills as a writer or anything.
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A pair of powerful spectacles has sometimes sufficed to cure a person in love.
~ Friedrich Nietzsche
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