Yeah, how long have you been writing? 'Cause when I first started out a month into it I was writing the same wanna-be deep repetitive things.
In the first verse, it sounds like your angry (at least thats what I get when I read things like ****ing) then in the middle you sound sad over. Then the last 1/3 still seem sad over it, but less sad in the cry sense. Your emotions are all over the place and not focused, I don't care for the theme cause it kind of is "she left me i'm sad" and thats boring.
Why did she leave you? How did it really make you feel? Describe your emotions instead of just going "oh, i'm sad" that doesn't let the writer in. If you're going to write an emotional song, be emotional.
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Originally Posted by METALLICA89
Ive seen you on muiltipul forums saying Metallica and slayer are the worst **** you kid go suck your **** while you listen to your ****ing emo **** I bet you do listen to emo music
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