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Old 04-18-2006, 02:40 PM   #15 (permalink)
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****ing.


Brilliant.


One of the best works I've seen. This is how you do it, people. I hate to say it but I feel the 'ain't home yet' but at the end of each line doesn't fit in, at least when I read it. It probably does the way you've got it worked, but to me it seems a little bit fiddly.
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