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Originally Posted by hobojesus
The Brain of flames and heart of gold part sum up what my Dad was like-Brain was always going and he was fiery, but he had a heart of gold. The next line mixes up mine and my Dads emotions-my half sister was born after my Dad passed away. And the last line probably doesn't mean anything to people who haven't experienced a major loss (I'm sorry if you have) but it kind of mixes up the sense of guilt you feel even though you haven't done anything wrong and also all the bad sh*t you get upto because you're all confused and you feel like the world is against you.
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ahh, gotcha now. The lines in themselves are great I think, and they do make sense in their own way, but when you put them all together one after another like that it's hard to discern meaning from them individually, and so what could be a really powerful message gets lost in translation you could say. I'd suggest expanding upon each of those lines in turn, perhaps making each concept into it's own verse. This subject is an insanely complex and powerful one, so i really feel you should spend time to fully develop each of your thoughts, because if you did the result would be really powerful.
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