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Old 05-08-2018, 04:55 PM   #656 (permalink)
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OK but if the story is ended (is it? Or is there a sequel? That is the end, isn't it?) how will I ever find out?

One more thing (sorry but you said to be brutal): when Chuck uses the phrase (and it's a great one, don't get me wrong) "a reflection of a smile", isn't this something very, well, flowery and literate for him to say, especially as a) he's scared b) he's wounded and most importantly c) he already admits he "ain't no Shakespeare"? Just felt, really forced and out of place. Personally, I would have taken that for the title but that's of course your call.

I'll read the next one tomorrow and hopefully have my thoughts for you on it then. Good stuff. Did you check that link? Look any use?
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