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Originally Posted by Zezima
Yea, good word use but it jumps around to much. I'm pretty sure its about an X girlfrind or boyfriend, but its hard to tell. Last line needs to be changed. Its pretty lame...................
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this is only the first draft of this song so there should be no jumping around of lyrics in the final version seen as all my lyrics will eventually have a place to go. as for the ex girlfriend thing well I thought it was pretty obvious that this is pure and simply a good ol fashioned murder song. I had a post in another of my threads that said that my lyrics were a bit too straight forward. I try to make them like that though-look at Nirvana, their lyrics were pretty straight forward and they had some of the best lyrics ever.