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Sljslj · 05-11-2013, 10:36 PM

This is a re-write of one of my works from when I was just starting out. The original can be found on the first page of this thread. I chose to make a new post instead of an edit because this thread is the only chronological catalog of my lyrics and I'd like to preserve it as such. I attempted to change the wording, flow, and imagery while still maintaining the same message, and feel I was pretty successful. I plan to post more re-writes in the future. As always, I sincerely appreciate you reading this.

EAT YOURSELF ALIVE

Verse 1
Boom!
The giant mushroom comes unfurled
Tired of he who claimed rights to the world
A mindset that for all brings decimation
Ideology that spells obliteration

Chorus
Ruination like this
It's like eating yourself alive
This self-wrought doomsday
It's like eating yourself alive

Verse 2
Slam!
The carbon footprint that crushes all
Is that of a being 6 feet tall
Who would try to find a scapegoat
An act of God or a broken nation
If not preparing for eternal vacation

Repeat chorus

Bridge
Thought we were in control
But that's a dead sensation
Someone calls for retaliation
But toward who? - we are all to blame
Victim and criminal are the same
So retaliate, if that's your game
Do so against your mother
Do so against your brother
Retaliate against yourself
Do what you will, die or try to survive, it matters not
'Cause sooner or later, we'll all eat ourselves alive
Yeah, yeah

Repeat chorus

Another bridge
Would you?
Would you eat yourself alive?
Stop killing yourself, stop killing me
Stop it, can't you see where this leads?
Forget fear, embrace love, concern
Put out the torch and cease this burn
And stop eating yourself alive

Final chorus
Ruination like this
It's like eating yourself alive
This self-wrought doomsday
It's like... It's like....

05-11-2013, 10:36 PM	#268 (permalink)
Sljslj The Omniscient Join Date: Mar 2010 Location: Reno, Nevada, USA Posts: 998	This is a re-write of one of my works from when I was just starting out. The original can be found on the first page of this thread. I chose to make a new post instead of an edit because this thread is the only chronological catalog of my lyrics and I'd like to preserve it as such. I attempted to change the wording, flow, and imagery while still maintaining the same message, and feel I was pretty successful. I plan to post more re-writes in the future. As always, I sincerely appreciate you reading this. EAT YOURSELF ALIVE Verse 1 Boom! The giant mushroom comes unfurled Tired of he who claimed rights to the world A mindset that for all brings decimation Ideology that spells obliteration Chorus Ruination like this It's like eating yourself alive This self-wrought doomsday It's like eating yourself alive Verse 2 Slam! The carbon footprint that crushes all Is that of a being 6 feet tall Who would try to find a scapegoat An act of God or a broken nation If not preparing for eternal vacation Repeat chorus Bridge Thought we were in control But that's a dead sensation Someone calls for retaliation But toward who? - we are all to blame Victim and criminal are the same So retaliate, if that's your game Do so against your mother Do so against your brother Retaliate against yourself Do what you will, die or try to survive, it matters not 'Cause sooner or later, we'll all eat ourselves alive Yeah, yeah Repeat chorus Another bridge Would you? Would you eat yourself alive? Stop killing yourself, stop killing me Stop it, can't you see where this leads? Forget fear, embrace love, concern Put out the torch and cease this burn And stop eating yourself alive Final chorus Ruination like this It's like eating yourself alive This self-wrought doomsday It's like... It's like.... __________________ MY LYRICS Last edited by Sljslj; 05-19-2013 at 02:14 AM.