woah not crappy !
For that song Temporary, I feel like it can use more concrete images. I really liked when you said "Words are thrown like stones And soon we're buried under them"
great line !
Try and have more of a developmental path in your next songs. like for example
Verse 1 - I remember the beginning
Chorus - This is what it feels like
Verse 2 - Things changed. everything is different now
Chorus
Bridge - can we get back to the way things were
Chorus
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