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Old 10-28-2012, 04:12 PM   #7 (permalink)
migliuks000
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Soo... I haven't been here for a while and in that time I wrote a song of some sort and I would love to hear what you have to say
(I still haven't thought up of a name i would love some suggestions)
So the idea is that the first verse is her words and the rest is mine and I put in some rap sequences if you can call them that because... Well i wanted to
I'm sorry for any mistakes since English isn't my first language...

Here it is:

Rap 1:
I'm drowning myself in the last words that you said,
My heart is almost breaking for your lost love.
I'm drowning myself in the last words that you said,
My heart is almost breaking for your lost love.


Verse 1:

It feels like I'm sinking so deep
And I can no longer sleep
It feels like i'm on a leash
When he's so out of reach

Why did the both of us have to part,
When in his hand was my heart?
I feel like I'm falling,
All the while his name I'm calling.


Chorus:
It's both happy and sad, but all the pain you had
Will just make you mad, If you say it's to bad
It's time to show him, what your really all for
Make him regret what's there no more.


Rap 2:
I'm wishing for you to again find your love,
Your heart to start healing with your new love.
I'm wishing for you to again find your love,
Your heart to start healing with your new love.


Verse 2:
Someday again you'll be whole,
No morre pain in your soul.
Just rip off that anoying collar
Around your neck that keeps getting smaller.

You will find someone better,
Who will make your haert flutter.
when you let the pain wallow,
and fell love strong but not shalow.


Chorus:
It's both happy and sad, but all the pain you had
Will just make you mad, If you say it's to bad
It's time to show him, what your really all for
Make him regret what's there no more.

It's both happy and sad, but all the pain you had
Will just make you mad, If you say it's to bad
It's time to show him, what your really all for
Make him regret what's there no more.


Rap 3:
I'm hoping in my very last word's that I said,
Your heart has started healing with your new love.
I'm hoping in my very last word's that I said,
Your heart has started healing with your new love.
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