Thank you so much for the critique! Wonderful response.
The lack of a bridge has troubled me as well. I usually have a bridge in every song, whether it is prechorus, outro, intro, or otherwise. I do not sing in this bridge while performing live, as I actually have my bassist have a solo.
Thank you for noticing the harmonics, I have been doing them more and more as I play the song out. Its development has been a slow one, and I find it changing slightly week to week.
I like the repetitive "thunk-a, thunk-a" as you described, simply because it gets in someones head. I have a sort of Johnny Cash feel on the verse, being simple as it is, and repetitive.
The resonance of my bathroom has finally been exchanged for some condenser microphones, and an audio interface. I shall no longer record in my throne room! My next recording will be accompanied by video, or pictures.
As for falscetto- I understand where you are coming from. I have recently (in the past two years) developed mine. I am still weary of using it, and expect the worst. It is the only thing that makes me nervous performing live.
The post-chorus bridge is really a fill for the bass solo.
The lyrics are about my alcoholism prior to my daughter's birth, and how I felt when I first held her. They should be much easier read knowing that my daughter's name is Gracie, and that I was an alcoholic prior to having her.
I sometimes am too cryptic writing, but I have been getting less so in this, and more recent work. The "shore" is comparable to drinking; much of my lyrics are akin to being too metaphoric.
Again I can't thank you enough for the criticism, I appreciated all of it. You gave me a great in depth analysis, and things to think about.
Thanks again - Caleb
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