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Originally Posted by The Bullet
it's suppose to represent the lifelong transition, incomplete by most of us, including myself, from fear to acceptance of death. It's also suppose to send out a message to do everything you want to do during those moments you feel inspired before you finally do die, because you have no idea weather or not you'll die today. The crazy **** you wanna do when you feel like everything is magical and beautiful before your come back to your civilized self and away from your primal senses. Ring up people you havn't seen in however long, run in one direction until you get lost, or whatever else. Probably the best thing I've ever gotten around to finishing. Enjoy!
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I love the concept behind your song, Bullet/Zach. Your message to follow your urges when you feel like everything is magical and beautiful, so that you don't live a bland life submerged under regrets and lost opportunities, is a powerful one.
Given the power of your message, I didn't expect your song to sound so light, meandering, and playful. I'm probably not the best person to review it musically, because I hate jazz guitar and jazzy-sounding improvisation, which sound insipid and directionless to me. However, I do like some dubstep songs very much and so I thought I'd add my thoughts about that aspect of your song.
I feel as if more of the power of your concept could come across in the song if you increased the bass notes. For example, I love the low sound you introduce at 1:13. I expected you to take that repeated note and go somewhere with it, perhaps around 1:45, such as by lengthening the note so that you have a wash of low sound. At 2:37 you do include some lower dupstep sounds. I recommend you increase their volume. Your use of low bass seems tentative right now.
I am curious what overall shape you envisioned for your song, if you had one. Having a central section that is heavy on bass, and tapering up to it and then away from it might be one way to give a sense of solidity to the song, if you want one.
Your song as is seems to have a lot of treble. Let's see...an analogy. Your song right now reminds me of an iceberg where only the top, the high part, above the waterline is visible. I want to hear all the low notes that are the main part of the iceberg *below* the water. Right now I can't see much of this submerged part of the iceberg in your song, and I want to.
I also realize, though, that this song is the result of your following your muse when you feel inspired...and so I respect the song for that. Listening to it is a little like going to a modern art museum. I'll look at some of the pieces and think, "Huh. Very unusual. I don't know if I like it, but I appreciate the whimsy." I did like the Asian influences I felt I heard in some sections of your piece.