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Originally Posted by amilia
Let me know what you think so far now this is my first post so take it easy 
title: Inspiration
Your like a dream...
its like your not even there.
i reach out to touch you, and you
disappear.
Your smile so sweet your my
inspiration.
My way through life
My desperation.
my goals
my dreams
my inspiration
my heart
my mind
my inspiration
You can take it all
And yes i know its very short right now cause its not finished :p and thats where it ends. Right now i am in the process of finishing, ill take any bad or good thoughts! |
Do you see how lolmaster posted? It is demonstrating rhythmic structure. It follows a pattern of rhyme.
There is nothing bad about it. It's your thoughts, and, you are trying to express them, so, don't let people discourage you from that.
I would simply suggest to follow a pattern of structure and rhyme. Google 'rhythmic structure', and, look at some lyrics to some of your favorite songs, and study the patterns.
And, don't let a boy or man mix your mind up to the point of writing poetry
They are not worth it. "Treat em like crap, and they'll love you for it". If you don't keep em guessing, they will always wonder if they can do better. That is over a half-century of Wisdom you just can't buy anywhere
And, that is coming from a man who knows men, and Loves women. Tom Petty
I am kidding, but, I am seriously kidding.
peace